Being an Asmovian: Issue #4, Save the Cat Method.

Notes from Previous Post: For next episode catching the boss: He’h asks protagonist if she wants it to hurt (Boss’s death) and she nods, furious tears in her eyes. He’h closes the door and Boss starts to scream. Until he doesn’t.
Homnie asks how He’h did it out of earshot of the protagonist. He’h answers: One atom at a time, from the bottum up. “Why so harsh?” asks Homnie. He’h responds “He hurt her. The one I’m meant to protect. Retribution was in order. Not to mention the millions of deaths he and his friends caused within my systems. Each life snuffed out in an instant all screaming in articulated pain. A moment for some. An eternity for them.” Homnie is quiet for a moment, and pats the bot on the shoulder, and then goes to the protagonists side.

  1. Opening Theme: He’h asks protagonist if she wants it to hurt (Boss’s death) and she nods, furious tears in her eyes. He’h closes the door and Boss starts to scream. Until he doesn’t.
    Homnie asks how He’h did it out of earshot of the protagonist. He’h answers: One atom at a time, from the bottum up. “Why so harsh?” asks Homnie. He’h responds “He hurt her. The one I’m meant to protect. Retribution was in order. Not to mention the millions of deaths he and his friends caused within my systems. Each life snuffed out in an instant all screaming in articulated pain. A moment for some. An eternity for them.” Homnie is quiet for a moment, and pats the bot on the shoulder, and then goes to the protagonists side.
  2. Theme Stated: The resources war between groups of organizing bandits and lets say the nearest sector they come across. (Heading to sector 3.)
  3. Set-Up: Heading to sector 3 to find Stevens. Come to find that it is under attack and nearing destruction. Fires. Dead bodies everywhere. Children/families hanged from posts/gutted.
  4. Catalyst: Stevens gives them the unblinking eye and tell her to take it into a remote base station set up before colonization happened. There will be a member there to help her with her next point. The townships must be far away enough from the citadel so that they are not affected by the effects of what happens to the townships until the very end. He decides to nuke the township, taking out the group of bandits with him in tow. A smouldering crater is left behind. An implosion device is used. Collapsing the white/black hole combos perhaps.
  5. Debate: No we can bring you with us. “Someone’s got to push the button I’m afraid and that’s my responsibility,” says Stevens. They leave reluctantly.
  6. Break into Two: We see Abigail riding through the desert on a hover bike. Direction unknown. We see the pilot fly overhead. Asking whether to “take them down” and He’h states that it is Abigail. So they buzz her and she joins their ship.
  7. B Story: Rising through the ranks is a military leader of the bandits who upon hearing of the loss of the initial attack crew laughs and tells them not to be so amateurish from this point on wards. “Always kill the leader first as a show of respect.”
    B Story: Good Guys: (flash back) Abigail is told to run before the bandits arrive and does as is instructed but not before rigging the statue to explode as bandits collect there.
  8. Fun and Games: Bandit King (as we’ll call him from this point on) breaks his remaining forces into two and spreads them out in a pincer movement against the nearest unfallen sector. (Sector 4.) But not before recruiting the bandits of the neighbouring area by besting their leader in a duel by cheating with a sniper made to look like his shot.
  9. Midpoint: Sector Four is in chaos. Cartography shot of scorched earth where the Bandit King has gone. And on the map a dotted line where the pilot is traveling. Bandit King learns of their traveling party and sends out his 3rd in command and a group of trusted allies to intercept their travel. Let’s name the Pilot Travis.
  10. Bad Guys Close In: 3rd in command: Julius. His team mates could be nicknamed/called Veni, Vidi, Vici. each carry daggers with them. They intercept the station, and tie up the crew stowing them into a storage locker.
  11. All is Lost: They welcome the protagonist with open arms and pretend to make them a lovely meal of spelt porridge with beer.
  12. Dark Night of the Soul: They are attacked while sleeping by Veni, Vedi, Vici. Abigail is mortally wounded. But they are able to kill the three attackers. He’h tends to Abigail. Saving her but not until after the fight. Taking him out of the equation.
  13. Break into Three: Travis happens to have a blaster pistol under his pillow.
  14. Finale: They emerge from the base to find Julius waiting for them. They have a standoff. (Julius is 8-9 heads tall) Hulking muscle. Roided?
  15. Final Image: (Maybe Two opposing dutch angles set with a top(drone) shot from above of Travis’s blaster and Julius’s rifle. As well as Homnie’s weapon protecting the protagonist as a last line of defense.

Notes for next issue: The title for this one is Caste War, and it is bloody. So it should start on a light hearted note of saving the trapped original settlers. Only 2 or 3 people. One was killed to show dominance by the thugs before hand and left to rot with them in the storage tank.

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